The Golden Fiddle
And if you win you get this glowing fiddle made of gold, but if you lose, the Devil gets your soul.
Those who want to use this should be very careful indeed.
Full Item Description
The Fiddle of Gold is a fiddle made of beautiful 18 caret yellow gold, with silver strings and velvet where the user holds it. If picked up, the user can sense a faint feeling of evil within it.It has a faint smell of brimstone.
History
Lord D'Oro of Vallermoore, who lived two centuries before Queen Yocasta's reign, was more then just a noble with skills in swordsmanship and administration and very little else. As a young boy he was awestruck by the great bards and decided to learn their skills. He spent several years being taught by the great bards of the Queendom and paying them well for their services.
One day he found another bard whilst on a trip to the then independent kingdom of Pier Point, who challenged him to a duel of music, promising to give him the bow if he won, whilst leaving what he wanted if he won, uncertain. When D'Oro accepted, the bard revealed his true shape, that of a Grishin demon, a four armed, green skinned, insectoid demon from the region of hell ruled by the Infinately Horrible Vizier of Hell.
He began to play a beautiful yet fearful tune that terrified D'Oro, but he managed not to give into it and in fact was so skilled that despite the demon's magic and great musical skill of it's own, he outplayed it. The furious demon said that had he lost it would have torn his body apart and feasted upon his soul. However, it's kind had a strict code of honour which even extended to humans in circumstances like this, and it had no choice but to give him the bow or look bad in the eyes of demonic society.
Before vanishing back to hell leaving the bow behind, it cursed it so that it would sooner or later damm it's users.
D'Oro was careful to only use the bow when he really felt it nesscessary and escaped the curse-as far as is known Hell never claimed his soul. Several other users have been less careful however, and paid for it with their lives and their souls.
Magic/Cursed Properties
If used by the average person, it has few magical properties other then to slow down the attacks of the lesser spirits, lesser demons, and Undead. If used by a wizard, it can stop all lesser demonic attacks whilst it is played and even have a limited effect on the Greater Demons for a short time. It cannot command them, only stop their attacks.
But in the hands of a skilled bard or bards who have spent years learning their trade, with a skilled singer as well, it can be used to great affect. Humans can be made to dance against their will. and cannot stop dancing until the fiddle stops.They can even be made to dance over cliffs. Lovesongs become seducing love spells, and other tunes can be used to sedate people, heal wounds if they are not too large and dangerous, and even change the minds of individuals. Bodies can be made to clamber from the grave and the right tune can make them attack people.
The bow is demonic and cursed, so whoever uses it, more so if they are able to use it's full range of magic, will have an almost overpowering urge to do evil with it, to rob, to injure and to kill.A PC using it should make a willpower check of some kind to beat the urge.
Also, it's playing attracts demonic beings.The lesser ones will be eager to please and will almost worship the user and beg for jobs-if none are given them they may well undertake missions of their own that they think the user wants. Whilst they don't ask for things in return, using them may well damm a user's soul.
If played too often and for too long greater demons might arise and different tunes will bring different demons-the playing of the Jaji Po, for example, may summon one or more Viles of Salt Unless the proper protective spells have been cast first, these greater demons may well decide to slay the player on the spot and take his/her soul. However, they will not or cannot do this whilst the player is still playing, however, as soon as she or he tires, then they tear apart the player's body and take the soul, leaving the fiddle where another human can find it,as they consider it a sorce of free food when it is in human hands.
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Ok, I am not going to vite on this till I think on it and read it some more. However my first thoughts.
Interesting take on an old song. Nice touch anf flavor for the fantasy realm. Now a few things. The name threw me off a bit I was thinking it was an actual bow not a fiddle. But hey Ive been wrong before about a title.
I would like more information on Lord D'Oro after he recieved the fiddle.
1) What did he do with it?
2) Why did he only use it three times before he died?
3) Was his death related to the fiddle? If so, did the fiddle, in it's inherant evil, wish for someone who would use it to it's potential so it had Lord D'Oro killed so it could find a better master?
Now for the properties. If a demon created this, why does it have properties over the undead? Two different realms of influence. Why would a wizard have more control over the undead when a cleric or priest would have far better control?
And why would they immediately die and be sucked into hell when this 'number' of evil crimes were commited? I would think thhat it would want to continue to be used as much as it could for evil and therefore when it found someone really bad would do it's best to keep them instead of shuffeling them off into hades the first chance it got.
Just a few ideas to think on.
I'll edit it tonight or tomorrow.
I will definately be waiting for it.
May I make a suggestion? 'Golden Fiddle' instead of 'The Fiddle Of Gold'
also, what Mourn said :D
Maybe it would have an effect on lesser demons/imps?
If that is the direction you want to go...
...then it should _attract_ imps and lesser demons, eager to serve a new master, begging him to give them things-to-do (and doing services on their own). The services will invariably turn ugly.
Updated: Updated to take suggetions into account.
I am glad I held off voting for this item, I like the idea of the fiddle being a bit of human-bait for demons, and I like the way you work the jaji-po and the viles of salt into the post.
Charlie Daniels would be proud! hmmm, I actually like the idea of a sub based on a song. I think I'll start a scroll!
+ 1/2 sword for the interesting re-vamp. Glad you finished it Cheka!
I like it, although it could still use a bit of polishing.
(Here comes the 'creative criticism' part, please take no offense...)
My first suggestion would be to use terms like 'neck', 'bridge', 'tail piece' and 'scroll' when describing the violin, and a bit more detail would be nice (a gold violin is nice, but one with a bit of scroll work and some interesting inlays would be a finer sight).
Like Mourngrym, I got a little confused with the emphasis on the bow. Is this a violin or a bow that the sub is about?
Your use of middle English is nice, but please, either use a bit more or none (you used 'whilst' five times for no apparent reason. I'm a fan of middle English and would love to see a bit more in this sub, possibly a block quote from part of the history.)
The Magic/Cursed properties are a bit all over the place, kind of hard to follow.
Polish it a bit and I'll put my vote in...